in worship, prayers
tears
making space
in me
for You
Open my eyes to see
how little of You
I permit
to fill
what I cherish
as mine
as if I have a right
to call myself
my own
Pour me out
the hunger
for what can not
satisfy
self serving darkness
feeds upon flesh
that crawls
from the altar
refusing once again
the death You desire
The place named
desperate
still waits
to be found.
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16 comments:
Interesting structure. It works; I like it. Lovely yet sad ending.
Catt took the words right outta my mouth. wanted to say the same.. the structure was very nice.. words to match.. sort of melancholic ending , but that works too! :D
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I love it, Karin. Thanks for the challenge.
nice. your closing lines wrap this up wonderfully...i too like the structure of this and the vividness of the sacrifice crawling off the altar....nice one shot.
hmm...
"Open my eyes to see
how little of You
I permit
to fill
what I cherish
as mine
as if I have a right
to call myself
my own"
who let you into my head?
good stuff
Being poured -- self is allowed to drain away. It's a beautiful prayer.
This felt like a prayer, of sorts, to me as well but at the end it turned as prayers sometimes do to a sort of universal question, a probe into the unknown. Carefully crafted. Thank you. Gay (@beachanny)
Wonderful write.
Very emotional and reads like a prayer.
Rich exploration and expression of that hunger for what is more. Veery prayerful.Thank you. - bill
Pour me out....I love the title...pour me out...and let God step in...and we will never be empty....blessings...bkm
Beautiful psalm...and prayer.
Nice One Shot! Glad you joined in!
Very nicely done. I found this almost tragic in its self-deprecating nature.
That battle with the flesh so vividly portrayed.
thank you for sharing with One Shot
Moon smiles
A perfect prayer..........
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