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31 May 2011

Abundant rain

Rain falls like
tears
unceasing
vision blurred
by one more day of
too much
we look for a dry place
forgetting
how it feels
to thirst
so bloated are we
by excess

will the floods come
washing away
all we know of this life
forgetting yesterday
unable to conceive tomorrow
we live wet
in this moment

vision blurred
to even now



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14 comments:

  1. ayalaMay 31, 2011 at 4:16 PM

    Rain does fall like tears....forgetting how it feels to thirst...I love this line-wise.

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  2. Brian MillerMay 31, 2011 at 4:35 PM

    for me this makes me think of the things we pray for...until we get it...and then really dont want it...

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  3. LouiseMay 31, 2011 at 4:53 PM

    Lovely poem.. 'we live wet in this moment'..like rivers of living waters.. :)

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  4. Kodjo DeynooMay 31, 2011 at 4:57 PM

    Great piece and we always need that cleansing rain.

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  5. Bradley HowingtonMay 31, 2011 at 10:04 PM

    I love this poem a lot! Well written! And rain does fall like tears. :)

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  6. The PoetMay 31, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    I like the opening lines of this one.

    Very nicely done.

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  7. FinallyMay 31, 2011 at 10:44 PM

    "We live wet in this moment." Love this line!

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  8. Elizabeth YoungJune 1, 2011 at 1:02 AM

    Yes, we're truly fat in North America with all we have, sometimes we do forget what it feels like to thirst. Thank you for this poem which lifts our hearts to question once more...

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  9. PatriciaJune 1, 2011 at 1:08 AM

    living wet, with blurred vision, one more day of excess... sad, but true. Good descriptions.

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  10. AnonymousJune 1, 2011 at 7:15 AM

    "will the floods come
    washing away
    all we know of this life
    forgetting yesterday"

    When the trials comes... we are tested. How quickly life can change.

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  11. Pat HattJune 1, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    Yes careful what you wish for
    As when you get it you don't want it anymore
    Plus rain can help was things away
    Except when it does it every single day
    Then it can just annoy
    And no longer be a joy
    But your write was great
    Like what you served up on your plate

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  12. UnknownJune 1, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    Awesome piece, I absolutely loved it. Reading it slow or reading it rapid fire succession, works either way and just such a nice and wonderful flow to it. Thanks so much for sharing:)

    p.s. Just wondering, in your main site picture, what kind of dog is that, I'm thinking Chow, but can't really tell-anyhow just curious, thanks again for a lovely piece:)

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  13. HopeUnbrokenJune 2, 2011 at 3:09 AM

    lovely piece of poetry. so many truths. i could so relate especially as we've had so much rain lately. just made the whole analogy that much stronger. thank you!

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  14. ReggieJune 4, 2011 at 6:19 PM

    This took me to those who have suffered due to heavy flooding. They have lost so much with only memories to hold.

    Very well written.

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